In our fictional worlds, virtue triumphs—it is probably just as well, therefore, that the villains don’t know they’re fictional, so they lay their mischievous, selfish, or downright wicked plans, sure that they will win the day.
Today’s work-in-progress Wednesday is dedicated to the ways they act. I’m looking for an excerpt—I say eight to ten lines, but whatever you need to give us a feeling for what’s going on—that shows your villain (male or female, an irritation or an evil danger) doing something that displays their real character.
My current work-in-progress is the story of David Wakefield, best friend of Rede, the hero of Farewell to Kindness. David and his heroine are private detectives back when the name for such people was thief taker, and Embracing Prudence (set earlier in the same year as Farewell to Kindness) includes one of the villains who so complicated life for Rede and Anne.
Here is the Earl of Selby. He has just blackmailed the courtesan into giving him a night in her bed.
“Tiv won’t be happy,” the Earl gloated.
“You will be, my Lord. I guarantee it,” Miss Diamond replied, her voice a husky purr.
The Earl caught up his hat and walking stick, and in one fluid movement, backed the courtesan against the wall, trapping her with his stick held across her neck.
“I’ll collect on that guarantee,” he said, his own purr sounding of threat rather than promise.
Miss Diamond did not react, standing impassively within the cage he’d formed of his body. He leaned the last few inches and slowly, deliberately, licked the side of her face, from her jaw up to her eyebrow, then grimaced.
In another supple twist, he was off her and heading for the door.
“Don’t wear powder tomorrow night,” he instructed, as he left.